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Today student are to turn in their reflection on an item that they may have fixated on while trying to acheive a goal. Verbally it may or may not have been announced in class to elaborate up to 200 words or 300 words. Going forward, any assignment will have a 300 word minimum as a standard unless otherwise indicated.
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The following graphic organizer was used to develop literal sentences: Students were asked to develop sentences such as
1. I ate a sandwich.
2. I fell in love.
3. I ran to the store.
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Protocol to get your work back in the books?
1. Make an appointment during an Extra Help session from 3-4:00 on Thursdays.
2. Make an appointment during a different time we are both available. DO NOT STAND ME UP. This is a privilege given to students who have already once come to an Extra Help session because you have demonstrated already that you can keep appointments.
**getting your book "reconciled" is YOUR responsibility. Not mine. Additionally, if you stand me up three times or more, you have revoked your right to seek extra help for the quarter and a letter will go home to your parents notifying them.
Homework:
**Pay attention to the section differences for homework 2**
1. Rewrite your item memoir you wrote for homework, this time including sentences that include literal, figurative and symbolic language. Minimum: 500 words. If you need a hard copy of your original and I have it, please see me.
2. (Section 1 and 2) Finish reading and annotating My Greatest Ambition. If you need a copy of the text or need to pick up your book, please see me. (Section 3) Read and annotate Fly in the Ointment by Pritchard.
3. Post a sentence that you developed in class that you think you did the best job on. An example would be:
Joe Student
IGCSE English Y2 - (1, 2 or 3)
Literal Sentence: I ate a sandwich.
Edit 1: I inhaled the turkey, bacon sandwich on bread speckled with grain my mom made for me.
Edit 2: The cold cut gave in to the grinder-like rotation of my teeth and the bacon unearthed its flavor. The bread was speckled with grain and I looked up at her just in time so my forehead met the weight of her hand.
Edit 3: The bread speckled with grain jacketed the cold cuts and bacon that gave in to the grinder-like rotation of my teeth. The suction and slapping of eating filled my head so much so that I failed to hear my mother's beckoning to take a bite of her apple. I looked up at her just in time so my forehead met the weight of her hand.
Literal Sentence: I ran to the store.
ReplyDeleteEdit 1: I dashed to the candy store.
Edit 2: Like a child to his parents, I dashed towards the embrace of the candy store, lulled in by the bright lights and sweet smells.
Edit 3: Like a child to his parents, I dashed towards the open embrace of the candy store. The facade lulled me in, rainbows, candy displays and bright lights coupled with the rich smell of molten chocolate were irresistible. Stepping over a golden wrapper, I reached the door.
Literal Sentence: I loved her.
ReplyDeleteEdit 1: I needed her.
Edit 2: I needed her. I needed her soft golden locks, bouncing up and down like springs.
Edit 3: I needed her, like the earth and its people needed the sun. I needed her soft golden locks, bouncing up and down like springs. Her eyes were of the most mesmerizing color, a light gray, imposing, like a statue. It was as if they spoke to me, when I passed her in the hallway, they would say, "I'm too good for you". Nevertheless, I needed her, I need her.
Edit 1- I ran to the store.
ReplyDeleteEdit 2- I sprinted like a lion after its pray to the entrancing candy shop.
Edit 3- I sprinted down the cramped cobble street, legs moving in a blur, like a lion after its prayI reached the store. The smell of sweet fresh candy wafted out towards me as i approached, my arm hairs rising and mouth watering. The eccentric display called me, convincing me to enter.
Edit 1 - I ran to the store.
ReplyDeleteEdit 2 - I sprinted across the street to the antique store.
Edit 3 - I sprinted across the street to the antique store around the corner, like a starving vulture dashing for its prey. The store emanated rays of warm light, luring me towards it. I remembered. I remember everything. The memories slided its hands around my neck, choking me. I was forced to the brink of my tears...but no matter what, I couldn't gather the courage to reconcile with my mother.
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ReplyDeleteLiteral Sentence: I ran to the store
ReplyDeleteEdit 1: I ran to the store sweating
Edit 2: I rushed to the store with sweat dripping down my face showing the exhaustion I had.
Edit 3: I rushed to the toy store, sweat dripping down my face showing how exhausted I was. I could not wait to buy this toy that recently came out. The toy was now mine and in my possession, scared to wet it with my sweat, I hold it with caution and distance. I whispered to myself "just how great was this store"?
Literal Sentence: I ran to the store
ReplyDeleteEdit 1: I galloped to the store down the road.
Edit 2: I galloped to the store like a horse to his master. As I galloped to the store I could smell the freshly baked buns from the bakery across the street.
Edit 3: As I galloped to the store like a horse to his master I could smell the freshly baked buns from the bakery across the street. As I approached the store I forgot why I had to go. I stopped in between the bakery and store not knowing where to go. Suddenly I could feel a tingling sensation in my nose. I was unsure of what it was at first but then I realized it was the smells from the bakery climbing up my flaring nostrils.
Literal sentence: I ran to the store.
ReplyDeleteEdit 1: I hurried towards the deserted store
Edit 2: I hurried towards the deserted store blindly, as my eyes were tearing up like a tap had just been turned on. The smell of burnt wood, creeping up my nose as I could see the flames taking the life of my favourite store.
Edit 3: I hurried towards the sad, deserted store blindly, as my eyes were tearing up like a tap had just been turned on. The faint smell of burnt wood, creeping up my nose as I could see the flames, dancing happily, taking away the life of my favourite store. The joyful memories that were made, were consumed by the fierce, raging fire. I slowed down, the smell of wood, getting stronger as I trudged along, devastated at the sight in front of my eyes.
Literal Sentence: I ate a sandwich
ReplyDeleteEdit 1: I feasted on my flavorful, turkey, bacon, sandwich
Edit 2: I feasted on my flavorful, turkey, bacon sandwich. I ate it ravenously like a vulture, feeding on its prey, the turkey, ripping by my trenchant fangs, and the bacon feeling the wrath of my unavoidable gulp. After each bite a blast of flavor surges into my mouth and I just want to eat more of this turkey, bacon goodness. The bread, toasted perfectly, was crunchy under my fingers and I can hear its scream, "Save me!"
Edit 3: I feasted on my flavorful, turkey, bacon sandwich. I ate it ravenously like a vulture, feeding on its prey, the turkey, ripping by my trenchant fangs, and the bacon feeling the wrath of my unavoidable gulp. After each bite a blast of flavor surges into my mouth and I just want to eat more of this turkey, bacon goodness. The bread, toasted perfectly, was crunchy under my fingers and I can hear its scream, "Save me!" My mother laughs as she watches me eat the sandwich so deliciously and she hands me my favorite cookie, the GingerBread Cookie, shaped like a man.
Literal Sentence: I loved her.
ReplyDeleteEdit 1: When I met her that night, I knew I had fallen in love.
Edit 2: I held a corsage as I eased my way up the the front door. My stomach danced to the fast beating of my heart. My hand met the wood. Thump. Thump. Thump. The door flung open and there she stood; her dress blanketing her silhouette, as if it was water cascading down her body. As she smiled, I noted that she smelled of theobroma oil. It was that day that made me love her.
Edit 3: I glanced down at the corsage in my hands. A rose. Red, like the color of my face. My stomach danced to the fast beating of my heart, and up the steps I went. One. Two. Three. My hand met the wood door. Thump. Thump. Thump. The door flung open and there she stood; her dress blanketing her silhouette, as if it was water cascading down her body. She smelled of theobroma oil, and the small gap in her front teeth shown as she smiled. It was that imperfection that helped me relinquish my nervousness, and it was that day that made me love her.
Extra Development: I glance down at her in my arms. Her shirt is stained. Red, like the color of my tearing eyes. The rubble of a car collision lies behind us, but the chaos is a blur. All I hear is her shallow breathing, and all I feel is my stomach dancing with the slow beating of her heart. The aroma of theobroma oil tangles with the stench of iron. Grasping her closer to my bosom, I cling to the hope that she won’t go on. But before the paramedics even hobble out of their vehicle with their useless tools, she is already gone. Eyes glazed over and her mouth slightly ajar, the small gap in her teeth is visible. It is this day that makes me realize that I loved her.
Literal Sentence: I ran to the store.
ReplyDeleteEdit 1: I sprinted the the closest store.
Edit 2: I sprinted to the closest store like a slave to his freedom.
Edit 3: I sprinted to the closest store like a slave to his freedom. My knees trembled and my blood gushed like an savage inward storm. The ground wailed under my rugged strides. I whiffed the fragrance of freedom. I was so close. My breath weighed me down like an anchor at see. But I had to go...
Literal Sentence: I loved her.
ReplyDeleteEdit 1: I loved her entirely; not every inch was not perfect and seemed tailored to me...
Edit 2: She was everything: my eyes did not see a form but a contoured line, an ambiguous form gliding and dancing towards me, smiling.
Edit 3: She was more then a precious gem; my cursory glance towards her reflected back a universe of signals that a human mind and retina is simply not capable of perceiving fully. To understand... It took something more then such mediums. My eyes did not see a form but a contoured line, an ambiguous form, gliding and dancing, like of a light and free pebble travelling downstream. My mind saw not a form, but an idea; a reflection of a small branch that has unconsciously grown and bosomed within me. The lines, the contoured shapes, the image, the pebble, the emotions.... They were all smiling back at me, like a deafening light penetrating my body. And I stared, as if a deep shadow has been cast upon me, a dark silence that lies in the centre of the sun.
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ReplyDeleteLiteral : I ate a sandwich
ReplyDeleteEdit 1 : I slowly ate a tuna sandwich looking really old made by a lady looking aged, dripping all the sauce everywhere on my plate. The mushy lettuce and the salty tuna made me mad, throwing cash at the cashier I made my way outside.
Edit 2 : I slowly ate a tina sandwich mostly filled with lettuce, made my a old lady carelessly dripping all the sauce everywhere on my tiny plate. As my jaws vigorously moved up and down like a crusher, I could taste the yellow lettuce crying for help, and tuna was swimming int he ocean in my mouth. Then throwing my cash and my half of my sandwich at the cashier, i made myself outside.
Edit 3 : i slowly ate a tuna sandwich mostly filled with yellow lettuce looking as aged as the fat old lady making sandwiches. Carelessly dripping all the sauce on my boring plain white plate. As my jaws vigorously moved up and down like a crusher, i could taste the yellow lettuce crying for help, perhaps thats why it was so mushy; the tuna was probably swimming around the ocean right before it ended up in my mouth. The sunburned bread on top crushed my last hope of eating a perfect sandwich during my lazy afternoon. I pulled out a tissue from it's house to wipe my mouth leaving more than half of the not eaten sandwich. I rushed to the cashier with my eyebrows tilted up high throwing the cash at her table. Then I walked like a soldier after battle making my way outside.
Edit 1: i ate a sandwich.
ReplyDeleteEdit 2: my mouth watered as the monstrosity of meat, vegetables and bread inched closer and closer to its demise, never to be seen again in the same form.
Edit 3: once the sandwich had said its last goodbye, i grasped it firmly in my hands, contemplating where to make my first bite, like a surgeon decides where to make the first incision. By now my mouth was drenched in saliva, begging my hands to inch closer and closer to my lips. as i took my first bite, i felt a rush of relief, i emptied my lungs with a sigh, concentrating on the intricate moshpit of flavours dancing around inside my mouth. But it all ended as soon as it started, thats when i remembered, i had only taken one bite.
I ate a sandwich
ReplyDeleteedit 1; I devoured the sandwich between slabs of stale bread
edit 2: I devoured the turkey, suffocated between slates of stale bread. I felt the bones shatter against my teeth.
edit 3: My teeth fell with decisive action upon the quivering turkey, as it watched its home of cold, stale rhye collapse against my tongue like an old crumbling quarry of stone. Severed tendons flew from the rhythmic mines, deep in my mouth as my eyes fell upon the exposed, twitching wing which lay among the rubble in my grip.
I ate a sandwich
ReplyDeleteEdit 1: I stuffed the chicken teriacky sandwich in my mouth.
Edit 2: The chicken teriacky sandwich raced into my mouth like a runner meeting the finish line. I could smell the roasted chicken hiding under the white bread.
Edit 3: It was a cold, dark day but I immediately felt better as I saw my mother bringing me a sandwich. "Click, click, click." There she came. I could smell the roasted chicken breast that was hiding underneath a large piece of white bread. The chicken teriacky sandwich raced into my mouth like a runner meeting the finish line. There it went, and in two bites it was gone. "Grrrrr!" That was the sound y stomach made and I realized I was up for more.
Andy Cho
ReplyDeleteIGCSE English Y2 (Section 1,2 or 3)
Literal Sentence : I ran to the store
Edit 1: I raced to the worn-out kiosk
Edit 2: I raced to the worn-out kiosk like a person who hasn't eaten anything for weeks. My stomach was growling as it reacted to a seductive scent like a radar. It knew what was coming.
Edit 3: I raced to the worn-out kiosk like a person who hasn't eaten anything for weeks. My stomach was growling as it reacted to a seductive scent like a radar. It knew what was coming.My hand, clinging on to two pieces of green paper, soaked by my sweat, had an unpleasant odor. But that didn't matter. Not after my tongue slithered around the rich, smooth chocolate,melting it in my mouth, and that was only the beginning.
Michelle Kim
ReplyDeleteIGCSE English Y2 (Section 2)
Literal Sentence: I ran to the store.
Edit 1: I flung myself towards the store with my heart bashing into my chest.
Edit 2: I flung myself towards the store like a wild man searching for his sanity. What I have I done? My heart bashed in and out of my chest as if it was trying to escape. I could almost hear my legs screaming at me to stop, but somehow my brain forgot how to stop running.
Edit 3: I flung myself towards the store like a wild man searching for his sanity. What I have I done? My heart bashed in and out of my chest as if it was trying to escape. I could hear my legs screaming at me to rest, but somehow my brain forgot how to stop running. It felt like I had drifted out of my body and lost all control over it. The only thing I could do was listen to the slapping of my feet against the concrete slabs as the salt in my sweat burned into my wounds.
Alex Lee
ReplyDeleteIGCSE English Y2 (Section 1, 2 or 3)
Literal sentence: I strummed my guitar.
Edit 1: I strummed my brand new Seagull brand guitar.
Edit 2: I strummed a Fmaj7 chord on my brand new Seagull guitar which gave off a beautiful and brilliant sound.
Edit 3: I strummed a Fmaj7 chord on my brand new Seagull guitar which gave off a beautiful and brilliant sound which rang through the air. The magnificent sound the guitar produced was a result of a series of 6 metal coiled strings made to an admirable precision.
The sound slowly faded away and the guitar yearned to be strummed to produce yet another sound. Combined, the strumming would produce a song to please all ears.
Joyce Lee
ReplyDeleteIGCSE English Y2 - (3)
Literal Sentence: I fell in love.
Edit 1: My mind, my heart and my whole being craved for him.
Edit 2: I've fallen into the hands of addiction. My mind, my heart... never mind... My whole being craved for him. Just hearing his voice sent shivers down my spine.
Edit 3: I've fallen into the hands of addiction. My mind, my heart... never mind... My whole being craved for him. Goosebumps erupted on my skin the moment I heard his inviting velvet voice. He hypnotized me, making me have the impulse to blindly listen and seek for him, like an entranced child. Click. Everything stopped. A surge of irritation overwhelmed me as I opened my eyes, revealing my sister glaring down at me before angrily tossing earphones in my face. Immediately, the nightmare amongst my dreams thumped away, returning to her disturbed peace. I leaned over towards the stereo, feeling oddly relieved as I recognized the familiar grinding sound of the earphones entering the jack. I plug the earphones into my ears, entering into my own wonderland once again.
Web Khewsubtrakool
ReplyDeleteIGCSE English Y2 – (3)
Literal Sentence: I ate a sandwich
Edit 1: I slowly picked up the sandwich as my taste buds cried for it.
Edit 2: I slowly picked up the sandwich as my tastes-buds cried a river in my mouth. At first touch, my mind was removed from my body. My soul has sunk into an abyss of emptiness. Sunk into my sub-consciousness I have.
Edit 3: I slowly picked up the sandwich as my tastes-buds cried a river in my mouth. At first touch, my mind was removed from my body. My soul has sunk into an abyss of emptiness. Sunk into my sub-consciousness I have. As the first bite commence slowly does bright lights appear. Like the fires works of wonderland it sprouted around me. They came in rhythm, they came in beat, and they came with every bite. Each bite was unique in its own right, each with colors that I never saw before. Sunk into a world now of colors but not emptiness. But as quickly as it began it ended. With the last bite I returned to reality, but a reality with the sandwich no more.
Jessica Woo
ReplyDeleteIGCSE English Y2- (3)
Literal Sentence: I ate a sandwich.
Edit 1: I munched down on the thick rosemary bread that held the teriyaki chicken secure.
Edit 2: My warm, tongue immediately grabbed the rosemary teriyaki chicken sandwich with saliva pouring to the front of my mouth like an abruptly turned-on water tap. My tongue released the food as it began its journey towards my stomach.
Edit 3: Even before the sandwich had reached my mouth, my tongue was already on its way to seize it halfway. My saliva immediately began to rain towards the front of my mouth like an abruptly turned-on water tap. At that moment, I could not concentrate on anything other than the crunch of the lettuce. After a few sloppy chews, I felt the chicken slowly dissolve down my throat into my anticipating, ravenous stomach. As I rested my hands on the lunch table the tingling of my taste buds resumed, pleading for another bite.
Caroline Adams
ReplyDeleteIGCSE English Y2- (3)
Literal Sentence: I ate a sandwich.
Edit 1: I could smell the sesame speckled sub as it made its way down the runway, gaining speed and moving closer until it entered my gaping mouth.
Edit 2: The alluring scent of the sesame speckled sub wafted towards my nose, while as if it were a jet, the engines roared and the wheels whined on their way down the runway, and into my gaping mouth.
Edit 3: The alluring scent of the sesame speckled sub wafted towards my nose, and notified me that the time for lunch had come. As if it were a jet, the engines started with a roar and the wheels creaked and whined on their way down the runway. It tried to take off before it was too late, however the powerful rumbling awoke the enemy. The ground turned to mud in its attempt to slow and ultimately prevent the ascent into my gaping mouth, but the determined sandwich won the battle. Victory was delicious.
Margaux Spriet
ReplyDeleteIGCSE English Y2- (3)
Literal Sentence: I ate a sandwich.
Edit 1: I shoved the empty sandwich, that I found in the trash can, down my throat.
Edit 2: My stomach was calling for it as I shoved the empty sandwich, that I found in the trash can, down my throat, like a farming machine dropping a pile of corn on the ground. My saliva made a sound as it grazed the bread.
Edit 3: My stomach was calling for it as I shoved the empty sandwich, that I found in the trash can decorated with announces full of threats, down my throat, like a farming machine dropping a pile of corn on the ground. My saliva bubbled continuously as it grazed the bread but I could not sniff a detectable smell. One slurp and the piece of bread was completely gone.
Saleh
ReplyDeleteIGCSE English Y2-(3)
Literal Sentence: I ate a sandwich
Edit 1: I snatched that sandwich from the sandwich distributor and completely devoured it.
Edit 2: As it came nearer to my annihilating mouth I could smell the sweet smell of the hot, white bread. The time between me picking it up and the sandwich arriving in my mouth was excruciating. But as it arrived my tongue couldn't wait, it grabbed the sandwich and sent it to my grinder like teeth and there it meet its death.
Edit 3: Chop, Chop, Chop went my teeth it was beautiful. My stomach was yearning for food, it wanted nothing more than that sandwich in its grasps. The sandwich had a lived a beautiful live from the moment of its birth in the oven to its death in my stomach. But with its death comes life.
Su Hyun
ReplyDeleteIGCSE English Y2-(3)
Literal Sentence: I ate a sandwich
Edit 1: My hands trembled as I held the sandwich; anxious of how my taste buds might explode any minute.
Edit 2: My hands trembled as I held the sandwich; anxious of how my taste buds might explode any minute. I held it close, I held it right in front of my eyes then to my mouth. At first, I nibbled cautiously like a rabbit. However, I soon came to realise I was munching hungrily since my stomach could not bare the emptiness.
Edit 3: My hands trembled as I held the sandwich; anxious of how my taste buds might explode any minute. I held it close, I held it right in front of my eyes then to my mouth. At first, I nibbled cautiously like a rabbit. However, I soon came to realise I was munching hungrily since my stomach could not bare the emptiness. Oh how beautiful it tasted! Each crunchiness was a sweet melody to my ears. There was no concentration needed. The crunchy lettuce and the coolness of the cucumbers was all I could remember... The rhythmic chewing and the dissolved flavour of the fried chicken are all I could ask for. Now, I look back in nostalgia of how lovely the sandwich tasted...
Jonathan Janson
ReplyDeleteIGCSE English Y2
Literal sentence: I ate a sandwich
Edit 1: I couldn't stand there looking at the savory sandwich being neglected so i grabbed it and munched it up.
Edit 2: I sensed a savory heavenly smell that i knew was close by, it was a sandwich. I couldn't stand there looking at the luscious sandwich getting neglected. I grabbed the sandwich and gave it another sniff of the sandwich before i munched it up. My first bite gave me the goosebumps because it was so delicious and one bite was never enough.
Edit 3: I sensed a savory heavenly smell that smelt from a distance, it was a warm sandwich which gave me the growl of my stomach. I couldn't stand there looking at the luscious sandwich being neglected. I grabbed the sandwich and sniffed it one more time before it got down my belly. My first bite of the sandwich gave me the goosebumps because it was one of best things i've ate in my life. After the first bite I didn't let go of the sandwich, I tore it into pieces with my razor sharp teeth which was as sharp as a knife. The rhythm of the chewing was NOM NOM NOM just like the Cookie Monster eating his cookies but with sandwiches. The grilled cheese and juicy bacon combination melted in my mouth and left me with a delightful feeling which i had never felt before. The crunchy lettuce gave the finishing touch to the sandwich making it more of a cool flavor to it. The beat of the rhythm i was going on was so fast that i realized i had finished the sandwich.
John
ReplyDeleteIGCSE English Y2-(3)
Literal Sentence: I fell in love.
Edit 1: My heart chose her.
Edit 2: My heart chose her.It was the eyes that caught me unaware. Like a dove they rose to meet mine and I knew then that I was caught, like a fly in a trap.
Edit 3: My heart chose her. It was the eyes that caught me unaware. Like a dove they rose to meet mine and I knew then that I was caught, like a fly in a trap.But i wasn't worried about trying to get out. Her words had immobilized me and my mind raced to no avail
Oliver Newman
ReplyDeleteIGCSE English Y2
Literal Sentence: I ate a sandwich
edit 1: I crunched on the toasted bread of the tuna sandwich filled with lettuce and raw canned tuna.
edit 2: as my teeth was crunching on the toasted bread and the contents inside the tuna sandwich, I could hear the uncomfortably loud sounds of my sharp teeth tearing and grinding the sandwich into small, digestible pieces
edit 3: It was easy to chew on, but wasn't enjoyable in the slightest. My teeth fed, tore and grinded the defenseless tuna sandwich to pieces. The sounds, which on the side were uncomfortably loud, that the teeth love to move on a daily basis, didn't really affect me; as if, I wasn't aware of what my teeth were even doing to a poor tuna sandwich.