Monday, January 21, 2013

Tuesday, January 22nd (section 3), Monday, January 21st (Section 1 and 2)


The midterm covering First Language Paper 2 was reviewed. Test-taking strategies were reviewed for questions 1 (Transformation), question 2 (Writer's Effects) and question 3 (Summary). For some classes, Mrs. Wilcox made an appearance and also reiterated test strategies and things to keep in mind. 


Question 1: Genre transformation

·      Tone is the Key (especially with dialogue) and creation of the voices that the 2 women would have.  In any text (letter article etc) the students must understand the voice in which they will write.
·      Address all 3 bullets

·      Length – it states 1.5- 2 sides

·      Imagined endings - too much deviation from the text (2 women going for coffee)

Question 2: Writer’s effects
·      Don’t go outside paragraph for info.
·      Don’t paraphrase analyse (PETER)
·      Short quotes (Words Phrases Images)
·      Bullet parts a) b) should be labeled and dealt with separately
·      Organization of this section needs work:
Grouping like ideas together to avoid repetition
1st sentence a thesis: The author describes the church as a terrible place for the wedding or Mr Kougar is described as being clownish, fun loving and clueless.
3-4 PETERs per answer

Question 3: Summary
·      No intro or conclusion
·      Planning works on 3 levels:
·               to ensure you have enough ideas (20+ to allow for errors in this one the three letters only got one point)
·               to avoid lifting from the text
·               to organize the ideas into similar ideas to avoid repetition or excess words.  


Since most students struggled with question 2 (Writer's Effects), students are to re-read the following excerpt and attempt the test prompt for section a only. Length: 1/2 to 3/4 a page only!
Paragraph 4: The church was a barn of a place, full of gloomy, eerie corners that goodness knows what livestock might inhabit. An intermittent dripping could be heard from somewhere far away, for today it was raining heavily and with age the roof had become an ill-fitting jigsaw. The congregation was aware of an unpleasant clamminess inside the church. Mrs Ferris-Grebe had chosen this place for her daughter’s wedding, as she and the major had been married here twenty-five years before. 

2 Re-read the descriptions of:
  1. (a)  the church in paragraph 4;
Select words and phrases from these descriptions, and explain how the writer has created effects by using this language. [Total: 10] 


Homework for Section 1: 

Answer the following questions and email Mrs. Lee at by 8:00 AM Thursday morning:

1. What did you notice about areas you can improve in
a. Question 1:
b. Question 2:
c. Question 3:

2. In review of my midterm, my narrative, my overall progress, effort and online presence, I believe my work this semester can be described as: (Choose one and elaborate).
a. Excellent because _____.
b. Good because ______.
c. Fair because _____.
d. Below my potential because _____.

Monday, January 14, 2013

Monday, Jan. 14th


Place: Robb Hall (NOT Black Box Theater!)
Time: 8:15 - 10:15
Bring: Black or Blue pen and notes on First Language Paper 2 Exam (1 sheet)
Note: I will be available at 8:00 on exam day outside Robb Hall so feel free to ask questions.

Monday, January 7, 2013

Monday, January 7 (section 1 and 2), Tuesday, Jan. 8 (section 3)

Happy New Year!


Today we reviewed what we left off with before Christmas Break. Precisely, simple, compound and complex sentences and how to use them when writing a summary. A worksheet was completed in class and students wrote a summary modeled after a sample summary with only simple sentences given in class about the following picture:

Student samples: 

The occasional summit of a rocky mountain is blanketed by the ghostly white clouds that lay low in the ominous sky. The valleys sweeped majestically between the mountains covered in green and gold brittle grass. The ripened wheat waltzed in the wind. The river snaked through the valley and shattered like a mirror as the wind hit its surface. The lone whit shed clung miserably to the edge of the water.  --Michelle Kim

**Notice Michelles's use of interesting verbs other than "to be" or "to have" and chooses the objects in the image to be the subject of her sentences, and then chooses interesting verbs. For example, clouds blanket, valleys sweep, the river snaked. She also huddles well-chosen adjectives next to her nouns such as lone and white to describe the shed or ghostly and green and gold and brittle to describe the grass.

Sparse clouds dot the dark skyline. Jagged mountains form valleys, their pinnacles piercing the heavens. Parched vegetation, golden and emerald, coat the canyons. Glowing wheat surrounds the lakes and waltzes with the wind. Weaving through the ravines, gentle streams wave with the breeze. A tiny white shed rests by the river. --Hugh Surdeau

**Hugh also uses well-chosen adjectives such as "sparse" to describe the clouds, "jagged" to describe the mountains, and "parched" to describe the vegetation. Additionally he uses interesting verb choices such as the describe the "clouds dot", the "vegetation ...coat the canyons" and the "streams ...wave". He includes complex sentences with dependent clauses interspersed between the independent clauses. 

"The gloomy and miserable sky dominates the landscape below it, and the only [things] that are visible above are the thin, white clouds which stand out from the darkness. The rocky mountains summits disappear into the black fog, and in between those ascents are valleys where light shines below. Since the light illuminates whats on the ground, the grass are simply shades of green and yellow, while the wheat appears to be a brilliant shade of yellow. Along the valley lies a river; where its water reflects the sky, and on the side, lies a isolated white hut." --Oliver Newman

"The dark skies, filled with white, wispy clouds, collides with the land, as the mountain peaks dip into the sky and vanish. Glancing upwards from the swaying grass, rough textured mountains stand rooted upon a translucent river saturated under viscous turquoise. Moisture, exasperated from the sun-bathed wheat fields, prevails throughout the picturesque panorama of the Alaskan Mountains. A wan white shed wavers under the grandeur alps. At a cursory glance, it seems almost as if the shed shifts continually under a mysterious force of the water." --Anno Chang

And for your FYI, commas and punctuation are important. Case and point:


Re-read A Horse and Two Goats for next class lecture.